The Hit

"We All Fall Down"

Logline

In the midst of his hired kill, a Hitman is visited by his drug abused Uncle and learns the essence of life through his six-year-old daughter.

BlueCat Screenplay Script Analysis

You have constructed an emotional, brutal, natural short film script that achieves most of what it sets out to do. To begin with, you employ effective scene descriptions that not only keep your script moving at a solid pace, but also don’t slow your reader down with unnecessary details. Additionally you manage to color in subtle characterization details through your descriptions too.

In terms of characterization you really do some wonderful work with Frank. In a very short amount of time you manage to dig deep into him, flesh him out accordingly, and keep him consistent through all of this. It’s fascinating how stoic he is initially, but how the presence of Emma can open him up so. Tiny like details like Frank kissing his charm before doing his work speak volumes for him so that he doesn’t have to. Even seemingly irrelevant details like how Frank orders a drink and his bar etiquette show you deeply the sort of person that he is. The same can be said for Johnny and how he conducts himself, in spite of him only being a minor presence.

How you use Frank and Johnny in contrast to each other is also very telling and effective, and just watching them bounce back and forth with each other is not only a testament to your characterization and dialogue, but also your tight plotting. This idea is only pushed further when you juxtapose Frank with Emma later on where he is using things like cigarettes for visual aids. Seeing how immediately they have a rapport and challenge each other and the welcome innocence that's present is a delight. There’s beautiful chemistry going on him.

This reunion of sorts that you have for Frank and his family, letting tension and awkwardness speak for itself goes far. It all feels real and fractured. Frank and Vincent for instance have a very touching meeting, but it’s steeped in the dread hanging over them and intervening elements like Emma’s presence (and then how this is used against their final scene together). You almost feel as awkward as they do as you go through it all.

Frank’s emotional breakthrough via Emma is wonderful. It feels genuine and watching him slowly and surely open up is a thing to behold. Similarly, Frank’s dressing down of Vincent for his drug use and basic negligence to who he now knows is a wonderful kid hits just as hard.

You get some nice mileage as Wolf approaches while Frank is out with Emma and there’s some genuine tension as these two worlds of his begin to collide as we begin to fear that something might go wrong.

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